This is a beautiful poem. I really like the colours of the text in this poem as well. Very creative! I like the rainbow...the feeling of beginning to end in a day... from waking up to going to sleep.
Suggestions: Maybe say what the orange apricots "smelled" like? Give a specific flavor/taste/aroma? And I am assuming that the sunglow is the colour of the sky as the sun sets?
This poem is full of imagery... good work! However... I think if you changed the first two lines, it would be even better! =)
This is a beautiful poem. I really like the colours of the text in this poem as well. Very creative! I like the rainbow...the feeling of beginning to end in a day... from waking up to going to sleep.
ReplyDeleteSuggestions:
Maybe say what the orange apricots "smelled" like? Give a specific flavor/taste/aroma?
And I am assuming that the sunglow is the colour of the sky as the sun sets?
This poem is full of imagery... good work! However... I think if you changed the first two lines, it would be even better! =)